Was there love between us or did I just imagine it?
During those beautiful days that we spent together
My heart resembles a country thats drought hit
I guess it will remain the same forever and ever
Now everytime I see you looking at me
I feel a thousand knives piercing my heart
Everytime you talk like this was all meant to be
I feel you knew of this right from the start
You took me to a magical place and deserted me in that maze
I was on my own when I had to find my way
Now the entire world mocks at me with disgrace
I donot know why I have nothing in return to say
This pain is overbearing and it brings no bliss
To withstand it I need some strength from above
I know the only remedy to all of this
Thats why all that I now want is to be killed by your love.........
Nice one... good attempt to bring out should I say your hidden feelings.... But,it is really good !!!
Keep it UP.. Good job
Touching..
good one.. but some of the stuff like "My heart resembles a country thats drought hit
" and "I feel a thousand knives piercing my heart" felt very repetitive and heard before...
Loved the ending though that was brilliant and awesome ending "Thats why all that I now want is to be killed by your love......... "
Hi Buddy, its really heart touching poem,,,,u hav d ability to express yourself…its a god given gift for u…keep writing …u can be a famous writer…..all the best…
@suma: No hidden feelings here.. This was written for a contest... :)
@Rachana: Thanx.. Im glad it gave the effect I wanted it to give..
@deepak: Yup.. Thnx for the comments.. will work on it... Glad you liked it..
@shailaji: Im overjoyed about the hopes that you have on me.. I too aspire to be a writer someday.. Thnx a ton... :)
Awesome.U have got so many emotions which in no way reflect on ur face ash.The last linw sounds nice...I'm reminded of the line "Kollu hudugi omme nannaaaa....Haage summane" :P
@vandu.. The secret behind the "No feelings" title i hav.. :-)